
Web site copywriting secrets; how to get your
web site visitors to buy.What’s the difference between web sites where visitors buy products consistently — and web sites where visitors don’t buy at all?
Many times, it’s not your product, price, or site design that make your visitors whip out their credit cards. Instead, your web site’s copywriting — the words used on your site — make all the difference.
Marketing gurus charge a lot of money to tell you how to write better web site copy. In fact, I recently paid copywriting guru Chris Haddad 5 figures to help me write sales copy for Inspiring Innovators and Be The Authority, my two upcoming membership sites.
Today, I’m grateful to be able to share with you two web site copywriting secrets I paid a ton of money to learn — and that will probably make your business a truckload of easy extra money. These work on any web site, by the way, not just on those lo-o-o-ng sales letter sites. After reading them, take a look at your web site. How can you update its copywriting to fit these guidelines?
Web Site Copywriting Secret #1: The Copywriting “Kiss of Death”
Over 90% of small business websites fail this simple test: Who does your home page talk about? If it’s about you, the company, you have failed.
The ironic thing is, as a consultant, if I were to come in to your business and implore you to change your home page from “Welcome to XYZ Blah Blah Company, the leader in the ZYX industry” to something like “XYZ Company helped Maria X of ABC Company deliver 57% more whatchabobs in 2008…learn how we can help you, too”, you might be quite resistant to that! (Another good reason why I don’t want to do big consulting gigs.)
There are two key points why Maria’s story is so much more effective than the stuff about you. One, it gets people interested. How, exactly, did you help Maria deliver 57% more whatchabobs? (If you put a picture of Maria — the real Maria — up, it’s even more effective.) Two, it draws people into your story as a company without hitting them over the head with how great you are.
No one cares how awesome you are, the bulleted list of services you provide, and where you are located. All of that information should be moved off of your front page and onto your About or Contact page. The main information on your home page should be how you helped a customer.
Specific is better. More people are interested in Maria’s story than in the fact that you helped 497 companies last year. Why is that? Whenever people read a story, they unconsciously put themselves in the other person’s shoes. People can’t really picture “497 companies”, but they can picture themselves as Maria, running around like a crazy person until you helped her.
Web Site Copywriting Secret #2: Envision Your Customer — Down to Their Eye and Hair Color!
When I talk to small business owners, I usually ask, “What is your target market?” I am surprised at how often they have some vague, grandiose answer. One friend I talked to recently said, “Women.” When prompted for more information, she said “Ages 18-65. Well, and maybe younger girls too. And moms. Moms who want their kids involved in the program. But maybe moms who don’t want to be in this program with their kids, too.”
She is certainly not the only one who has no idea what her target audience is! I would say at least 50% of new web hosting companies define their target market as “small businesses.” Recently, some of them got a little more savvy and said “Local small businesses.”
None of these answers are acceptable!
Learn from Trader Joe’s and the “unemployed college professor”
Recently, I was reading Made to Stick. Its authors mentioned that Trader Joe’s had done this exercise. (If you haven’t been to Trader Joe’s, it’s a grocery store that is rather kitschy and sells good food that’s inexpensive and healthy. in fact, I am eating some of their Baked Cheese Crunchies as I write this.)
The good folks at Trader Joe’s decided their market was an “unemployed college professor who drives a very, very used Volvo.” They gave the guy a name (let’s call him Don for this blog post), a location, an age, named what kind of car he drove, wrote out his career path, and filled in as many details as they possibly could about him. Then they passed this guy’s profile around to all their decision makers.
This made Trader Joe’s decisions easy. What kind of food should they stock? Well, what would Don eat? What would he want in his fridge and freezer?
Where should they open a new location? Well, where does Don live? Probably in suburbia…so let’s open a location there. Maybe near a college…so let’s open in those areas.
What should their marketing be like? What would Don read? (Trader Joe’s delivers a “newspaper” to all their loyal customers every couple of weeks, full of goofy stories about food instead of the typical full-color spread of specials.)
What should their promotions be? What would Don enjoy? (Currently running at my local Trader Joe’s is a weekly drawing that you can only enter if you bring your own reusable grocery bags.)
It’s Scary to Do This!
Most people are scared to do this because they are afraid it will exclude customers. On the contrary — I doubt you’d find too many people who exactly fit Don’s profile walking around your local Trader Joe’s at any given moment. But knowing an exact person that you are marketing to helps you quickly make decisions.
I really thought about this one for Inspiring Innovators. Finally, I decided my target market was me at age 21. I had started Simpli (my hosting company), but it wasn’t really going anywhere, and I doubted it would make it. I wanted to start a different web business, but I just didn’t know anyone who had created a successful online business.
I was struggling to figure out who I was and where I fit in this life. I didn’t have a whole lot of friends and I certainly didn’t have access to any millionaires. Yet I was pretty sure that this Web thing held the key to both a lot of money and a far better job than the one I had just left at Sun Microsystems.
Getting Into the Mind of Your Customer
I took several deep breaths and plunged back in time to that full-of-doubt younger me. I was angry that my boss at my previous job had no respect for me. I was making crap wages and was scared to give my consulting clients my bills. The driver who drove the train I took to work had a higher salary than me. I couldn’t seem to make ends meet.
It was the middle of a recession and there were no jobs. I had just interviewed for a job, aced the freakin’ interview, and then they declined to hire me because they said I would just leave to start my own business. But at that point, I would have happily given up my business for the $74,000/year salary they were paying.
I let all that sink in, and then I started writing. And it all came out…all the emotions went right down there on the page. So frustrated because I knew this web thing would work, but didn’t have anyone to talk to about it. No one I knew was successful. The successful people were hidden far away from me, and I didn’t even have enough money to take them out to dinner!
These case studies Inspiring Innovators was selling were awesome because there I could finally learn from the experts with money that I had available. I could scrounge up the few dollars a month to pay for the interviews and listen to these folks. I was convinced that one of them (or more than one) would hold the key to me getting out of debt and making my life better.
The Big Shift
As soon as I put myself in my own younger shoes and wrote from that perspective, something shifted. I was no longer writing a sales letter. I was writing a story. I knew it would resonate with so many of you, because I knew who my customer was. I was doing this all for that lost, frustrated 21-year-old, and it was an amazing gift for her.
This exercise isn’t easy. Sometimes your target audience won’t immediately be clear. It took me over an hour to get the courage to think that maybe my target for Inspiring Innovators was me at a younger age. I had a lot of doubts — shouldn’t it be someone else? But the younger me fit so perfectly that I couldn’t shake it, and I ended up writing the sales letter with a fervent passion.
Your target may be you. But it probably won’t be. Who do you know who could benefit from your business? Take them out to lunch and listen to their fears and frustrations. Then write the sales letter for them…just them. Even if they don’t buy, if you have the picture of them clear, someone else will. Better yet, they will feel like your web site copywriting was made just for them, and they will be more likely to be loyal customers.
Inspiring Innovators launches next week! Make sure you are subscribed to erica.biz, as I have some amazing free videos, a free Blog Success Manifesto, and even a free case study for you! Stay tuned…
Recommended Reading:
- Here’s how to become rich: Deliver value. Change the world. How I decided to change Simpli’s website to better reflect what our customers wanted. A real-world example of some of the concepts in this post.
- Hypnotic Writing: How to Seduce and Persuade Customers with Only Your Words by Joe Vitale. This is an excellent copywriting resource; I have been referring to it as I write for Inspiring Innovators.
- Why Your Business Isn’t Doing As Well As It Could Be. Why most bloggers and web business owners don’t make a lot of money.
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22. May 2009 at 2:15 am
This is a very timely post for me as I am working my way through Gerry McGovern’s book “Killer Web Content”. One of the main messages in his book is defining personas for the people who will use your site and construct content with them in mind, even if they differ with your own persona. Having read your post this really emphasises this point even more.
22. May 2009 at 6:02 am
This is powerful. If you’re selling something technical on the web, you have to explain the product or service concisely. 10 years ago I worked at a job where we wanted to hire someone to do schematic-level design of power supplies. The hiring manager had someone in to interview. It took the manager and the candidate several minutes to work out that the manager wanted schematic-level power supply design and the candidate only provided physical PCB layout of power supplies. In technology, you have to be very clear about exactly what you’re selling and looking to buy.
Your post warns against letting the legitimate need to explain exactly what you provide cause you to talk only about yourself. I like the idea of finding ways to provide that same detail about a product in the format of a client’s story.
It reminds me of Thomas Stanley’s line (borrowed from one of his subjects): Me, me, me is dull, dull, dull.
22. May 2009 at 8:11 am
Only two points, but they’re so powerful! I can’t believe this is the first time I’ve found your blog.
I love your Kiss of death point. So many companies use superfluous words like “industry leading”, “leaders in innovation” and they ultimately mean nothing.
Just stumbled and submitted your site to Viralogy. Hope you get some great traffic from it.
- Jun
22. May 2009 at 4:44 pm
These are great tips for aspiring web writers, Erica. I’ve added this blog post to the “Additional Resources” section of my online copywriting tutorial:
http://www.postcardsmart.com/copywriting/
Have a good weekend.
-Brandon
28. May 2009 at 7:40 pm
This is good advice, Erica. Kyeli and I named our person Amy. Amy is a lot like us at a younger age, too. It’s neat when it ends up that way. It’s kind of like the positive side of the usual error — since you know yourself very well, you can predict what you would want. (:
7. July 2009 at 8:51 pm
very good points. I have tried to implement that as much as possible into my stuff and I know I can still improve even further. thanks for sharing
26. July 2009 at 1:36 am
Thank you for a great article, aspects take you out of your comfort zone and you need to do this to get where you are headed, keep well.
17. December 2009 at 7:21 pm
Great article on identifying your niche. In any business, the narrower you make your niche the larger you can make your market.
I have a career blog that I started writing for the IT Career Seeker and it has gotten broader. Even with great content, I got away from what you are talking about so it becomes one of many other career sites..
Thanks for the timely article.
Bill Morgan
The Job Swami Career Advice Site